During the peer reflection sessions, I habe learnt how to improve on my writing skills by the process of reading comments from classmates, and writing comments to others.
For my problem solution essay, I received comment from My classmate and felt that his suggestion is constructive and really helpful. He pointed out that my introduction can be strengthen and clearer, as I did not explain the relationship between social media and copyright infringement clearly. He also suggested that I should explain the problem with more detail in introduction to make whole essay clearer.
I agree with him because the topic which I had chosen is not very popular and general enough. After I reread my essay, I realised that I really need to add in more explaination in first part of essay; the link between social media and shopping website is weak and confusing. Likewise, my tutor suggested me to define some particular nouns, such as Taobao, which is one of the biggest shopping website in China. It may be confusing if reader do not familiar with it or had no experience of online-shopping. Problem solution essay should be general as it is presenting to everyone, I have to make sure that everyone are able to understand every specific words in my essay. Peers comments was helpful as it figured out the problem in my essay so I could improve on it.
Apart from reading feedback from others, this activity also gave me a chance to read others essay and learnt how to write in a better way. After reading some of our classmates’ essay, I found that they have concise and clear introduction and good organisation, which made their essay flow and clear, and that is what I should learn from them.
In conclusion, through reading and commenting others essay, I have learnt how to develop on my own essay, as it enable us to discover our problem in writing and give us a chance to improve and learn from others.
Thank you, Wei Chuan, for this highly focused reflection. I especially appreciate how you describe the actual feedback process for the reader response, detailing the commentary that your peer had and explaining why this proved to be useful.
回覆刪除What might have made this an even better reflection -- tied that is to the prompt -- is if you had explained whether or not you might be able to achieve such results in the future.
In any case, I appreciate your hard work this term. All the best as you continue your learning journey!