During
the peer reflection session, I received comment from Asyraf and felt that his
suggestion is constructive and really helpful. He pointed out that my
introduction can be strengthen and clearer, as I did not explain the
relationship between social media and copyright infringement clearly. He also
suggested that I should explain the problem with more detail in introduction to
make whole essay clearer. I agree with him because I had chosen the problem of
copyright infringement on shopping website as my topic, which is not very
general. After I reread my essay, I realised that I really need to explain more
in first part of essay; the link between social media and shopping website is
unclear and confusing. Likewise, my tutor suggested me to define some particular
nouns, such as Taobao, which is one of the biggest shopping website in China.
It may be confusing if reader do not familiar with it or had no experience of
online-shopping. Problem solution essay
should be general as it is presenting to everyone, I have to make sure that
everyone are able to understand the specific words in my essay. Peers comments
was helpful as it figured out the problem I had so I could improve on my essay.
Apart
from received the comment from others, this activity also gave me a chance to
read others essay and learnt how to write a better essay. After reading some of
our classmates’ essay, I found that they have concise and clear introduction
and good organisation, which made their essay flow and sound. Through reading
and commenting others essay, I has learnt how to develop on my own essay. In
conclusion, peer reflection enable us to discover our problem in writing and
give us a chance to improve and learn from others.
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